1. Royce says:

    It’s too small to be a pooka.

  2. Christian says:

    I’m sorry, I don’t understand what you’re getting at with this excerpt. It’s odd, yes, but what does it mean? I’m sure we have all written something that sounds great in our head but when we put it to paper it either comes out badly or different to what we intended.

  3. Stuart says:

    That’s pretty much what I was getting at with the post, Christian. I enjoy playing around with weird concepts, but it can be very hard to communicate them accurately in a way that doesn’t confuse the reader. 🙂

    This excerpt is introducing a character from a race that has been cursed to be forgotten (more or less). So any time you stop seeing the rabbit-thing you instantly forget about it.

    That gets explained a bit more a paragraph or two after this excerpt ended (I didn’t want it to be too long) and without it I think this helps illustrate the point. 🙂

    This story was full of this kind of weirdness, which is one reason it’s on a haiatus right now.

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