1. Terri Main says:

    In some ways I think our writers are too influenced by movies and TV. They take “Show, don’t tell” too literally. They seem to assume people have no imagination. I recently read something where the author said something like. “He lifted his shoulders a few inches, the tips of his shoulders brushing the edges of his ears and then lowered them in a second.”

    Hello! Why not just say “He shrugged.”

    That’s where having words and using words is different. You can fill a sentence with words, but that doesn’t mean you are using them to maximum effect. And, yes, much of today’s literature is written more like a movie script than a novel. Some narration is perfectly alright. And sometimes it is most appropriate to tell instead of show.

    TErri

  2. Patricia Wrede has a great series on words going on right now at her blog, called “The Lego Theory.” She compares words to legos, which authors should thoughtfully fit together to form great art.

    • Thanks for the link! I just hopped over there and read a bit of the current post; LOVED it. In fact, I’m teaching a writing workshop next month and I think I might quote her.

      Her book “Dealing With Dragons” was one of my childhood favourites. I didn’t even know she was blogging these days.

  3. Stuart says:

    Yep I think the whole “show” part is more about conveying emotion and a sense of being rather than painting a word picture.

    You can’t “show” something in a book by just focusing on the visual. The words picked have to have the weight of all the senses and all the emotion that are built up in the scene.

    Like the example given above with the shrugging, if you give a clinical visual of a man shrugging it shows nothing more than if you said “he shrugged”.

  4. You can’t “show” something in a book by just focusing on the visual. The words picked have to have the weight of all the senses and all the emotion that are built up in the scene.

    Exactly!

  5. There is just something about words 🙂 As a mother of 4 young children, I read a lot of children’s books and one of our favorite series is the one about Skippyjon Jones, a siamese cat who pretends to be a chihuahua down in old Mexico (I know, I know, weird lol). But the way Judy uses spanish and spanglish and the beat of the words, I find myself breaking into spanish and rhyming after putting the kids to bed lol.

    Another favorite is Shel Silverstein (Where the Sidewalk Ends). Or the Fancy Nancy books that subtly introduce children to large words (love the illustrations too!) or…. I could go on and on 😛

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